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cora_217

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PostPosted: Thu Mar 09, 2006 7:12 pm


http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=2374197 <---- here's the url
alright so i didnt post them in here but if you read them even if its just a couple and have some feedback or wanna make a comment or two i wouldnt mind in fact even if you want to tell me how much my writing sucks i would like any kind of responce ^^
PostPosted: Wed Apr 05, 2006 2:47 pm


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Okay i finaly started to read these. It seems like you based it off of D&D or another rpg. I only got through the first three. I have problems with paying attention when I read anything I get easily sidtracked in my own thoughts but this held my attention very well I assume you intend to continue with this series, yes. I'm sure if you organized these it would turn more into a novel. Its okay if its short now. As long as you don't loose interest It shall continue to grow.


yes as you will notice later down she is based off a d &d character that sort of evolved... im glad that you were drawn in bt my stories... that is what they are designed for, to draw the reader in and try and get them to read more and stay intrigued... i have a few more in the process. and accually i was thinking about making cora's life into a book, though i have to get her death finalized... yes she does die eventually but it is getting harder and harder for me to write the story because well cora has been my umm well inspiration for what 2 or 3 years now... she started geting developed in my freshman year of highschool so ya i guess its 3 years now... and well she dies... and its really depressing!

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 1:27 pm


That's a bit depressing but osomne (I don't like the spelling of awsome so I changed it. I also changed with to wik) Not many main characters die. I think that the author just gets too attached to them before they finish.

That remineds me in history class my teacher was showing national treasure because of pssas (Pennsilvanial standardized test of somthing or else) but any way the part about ten or fifteen minutes in the ship scharlet explodes with the main character in it after a conflict with a once friend now foe. and anyway apon doing so my teacher stood up, walked to the tv and said "well thats the end... their dead and the bad guys get away... oh... yeah... I've always wanted to make a movie like that ya know. It's like comertial is the movie exept for the end." well that was a bit long but I hope you got a laugh out of it. take care.
PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 12:53 am


ya when i told some people that did some text based rpging with me to help develop cora's life that she had died they had nearly killed me... after all there is something about a character that if you work with it for long enough it becomes a part of you... and they certanly had spent their share of time with cora ^^

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 6:40 pm


could I join in on that? It seems like a good time
PostPosted: Tue Apr 11, 2006 10:39 pm


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could I join in on that? It seems like a good time
if your truly interested in rping with me and stuff i have one going right now you would have to read back a little to figure out whats up im trying really hard to get one of the main characters back in action that seems to have dissapeared but umm well here is the url:
http://www.gaiaonline.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=5738650&page=205
it would be easy for you to sneak a character in just have him come in in the deserted town or what ever...
as per a pretty basic summary some demon or what ever was trying to open the gate to the gods so they could kill them off... and well we beat them up... or at least one dude did the rest of us kinda watched...
and then the gate to hell was gonna be opend to unleash a bunch of crap on to earth and so now we need to kick the ring leaders a**... and so ya... pretty much trying to figure out what were gonna do about that and how... cora has really gotten her self mixed up in some really weird crap this time...



also if you wanted a rather less intence and not so well established rp thats only on its 5th page instead of its 205th page
this one pretty much my chick met up with this mute werewolf in his human form, its just about to be a full moon outside and she is clueless and hungry...

http://www.gaiaonline.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=12994396
here is the url




if your not interested thats alright a simple advertisement then for any one who is... so long as when you come in it makes sence and you know whats going on i dont care when you join ^^

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 5:59 pm


If the one's already this far along its a bit late. The other doesn't interest me but next time one gets started up let me know. One last thing could I add you to my friends?
PostPosted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 10:23 am


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If the one's already this far along its a bit late. The other doesn't interest me but next time one gets started up let me know. One last thing could I add you to my friends?
no problem ^^

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 10:34 am


One last thing could I add you to my friends?
PostPosted: Thu Apr 20, 2006 10:43 am


yup no problem ^^

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